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comes rolling out of my pursed lips
like smoke curling under the door.

Somebody’s going to get burnt soon.

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3 thoughts on “Poetry

  1. Ravishankar July 1, 2013 at 09:35 Reply

    i liked the first line but not the second one…as then the whole of it is gives a feeling of prose…i think the second line should have better figures of speech…like burnt to the colour of smoke or brunt brown… or even using terms like roasted/toasted or coated to describe the effects of burning…


    • IdeaSmith July 1, 2013 at 22:13 Reply

      @Ravishankar: Rather cliched that, don’t you think? I wanted to bring out a less familiar nuance of fire than the usual toast, roast, charred, ashes etc. Also, this originated on Twitter so it had to be within 140 characters.


      • Ravishankar July 3, 2013 at 10:30

        got it , twitter needs that discipline…


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